英語の添削結果 -１月２３日

今回も、いつものように英語のパートナーに英語のエッセイを添削してもらった結果をメモっておきたいと思います。今回はわりと良いできだったみたいですが、厳しめに添削してもらいました。

文章の修正箇所は、太字は追加、打ち消しは削除です。

あと、今回から語彙を増やすべく、新しい表現や、知っていたけど使えていなかった単語をメモしておきたいと思います。

Words and Phrases

- compromise

- compassion

- altruism

- strive for

- nitpick

- stimulate

- wonder

- superfluous

- eminent

Correction

- Curiosity leads TO creativity.

- STIMULATING(Keeping) his or her own curiosity is difficult.

- At (his) 5-yearS (old), he WONDERED (thought that) what is life.

- After GRADUATION (he graduated) from (his) medical school, he decided to become a researcher.

- He is (a) one of the most eminent researcherS.

- When he was a college student, he traveled all over the world, (and he learned) LEARNING about different cultures.

- (He was) ALREADY AS a child (who) HE loved mathematics.

- He was curious about not only mathematics itself, but also (an) ABOUT THE application of (mathematics) COMPUTATION to the real world.

- He (discovered) DEVELOPED/CONSTRUCTED an algorism for stock PICKING AND investment.

- After (his discovery) THAT ACCOMPLISHMENT/INSIGHT, he implemented his investment algorism.